Well done for participating in this years' SLJ programme, "Changemakers: People who have changed the world" - thanks for your response to activity 2: One Small Step for Man.
I really love your poem, it's simple yet effective. I enjoy how you start and end with 'Moon' - that's really powerful and rounds off the poem efficiently. I think that the use of 'overwhelmed' is all that is necessary, I mean - IMAGINE walking on the MOON!
Well done Annaleeze, looking forward to more of your mahi.
Hi Annaleeze this is Mrs Collins from Manaiakalani and I'll be commenting on blogs over term break. Well done on posting and participating in the SLJ this year. I really like the poem you created about walking on the moon - would you REALLY like to walk on the moon? I'm not too sure I'd like the journey there... Keep blogging, and commenting on others, to increase your chance of winning one of the awesome prizes and to keep up your learning over the school break!
Kia ora Annaleeze
ReplyDeleteWell done for participating in this years' SLJ programme, "Changemakers: People who have changed the world" - thanks for your response to activity 2: One Small Step for Man.
I really love your poem, it's simple yet effective. I enjoy how you start and end with 'Moon' - that's really powerful and rounds off the poem efficiently. I think that the use of 'overwhelmed' is all that is necessary, I mean - IMAGINE walking on the MOON!
Well done Annaleeze, looking forward to more of your mahi.
Ngā mihi,
Jordan
Hi Annaleeze this is Mrs Collins from Manaiakalani and I'll be commenting on blogs over term break. Well done on posting and participating in the SLJ this year. I really like the poem you created about walking on the moon - would you REALLY like to walk on the moon? I'm not too sure I'd like the journey there... Keep blogging, and commenting on others, to increase your chance of winning one of the awesome prizes and to keep up your learning over the school break!
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